Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

People spend
majority
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of
time
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their time
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in their entire life and have different purposes to achieve. It used to be more common to work for an organization.
However
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there is a gradual change in
this
traditional trend with
a growing interests
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a growing interest
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toward
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in
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self-employment
. I will examine some contributing factors and potential disadvantages that may be brought
by
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this
change. There is a certain change in the current view toward work among many
workforce
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. Being employed in a
company
used to be regarded as safe since
devoted
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the devoted
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commitment of
workers
to the organization
allow
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them to gain
prolong
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employment and promotional opportunities.
As a result
, many employees
dersire
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desire
to remain in the same
company
both for economic benefits and safety.
However
many
workers
are now threatened by an unexpected bankruptcy and lay in the current stagnant economic situation.
For example
, Amazon, one of the biggest
company
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companies
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in
US
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the US
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, announced
layoff
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the layoff
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of a thousand
of
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workers
without previous notice. The truth that working in a
company
is no longer safe than before is a primary reason for their transition to
self-employment
. Regardless of the growing shift toward
self-employment
,
workers
need to be aware of
potential
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risks that come with it. The biggest problem that troubles a business owner is
a
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large amount of financial investment required to initiate a new business.
In addition
to
such
financial burden, there are a number of other difficulties that a
company
faces including hiring talented
workers
, their education, and
advertisement
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to spread its reputation. Being overwhelmed by
the
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loads of work and great responsibility, self-employed business often fails with only great loans left to pay back. In conclusion, while
self-employment
is a popular trend today, people should not ignore the fact that starting
own
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their own
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buisness
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business
often comes with great risks
of
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both finance and management.
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  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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