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Some believe that showing people happy pictures (pictures in which outstanding achievements are made in helping the poor) is more effective in encouraging them to take action to solve poverty than sad pictures ( that show how hard life can be for the poor). Do you agree or disagree? Why?

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Showing two kinds of photos to the folk who are trying to solve the issue of poverty, one is positive, the other is negative. If someone is in difficulty, he needs to strive to do his best to change his life and needs help. There are two ways to help him; one is showing an individual a happy picture, which contains some achievements made in helping the poor; the other is giving him a sad photo that shows how hard life can be for the poor.I think it is eventually a decision of how to push a person in the right way: constructive way or deconstruction. Which one is better?
However
, I agree with the
last
.
Firstly
, encouragement is always a good method to make human being more powerful. Positive material expresses a practical attitude that leads a person to follow a road to take action.
For example
, parents could educate their children by telling them that the purpose of studying is not for themselves but for helping the world; it is smarter to keep reminding them of the bad consequences of laziness.
On the other hand
, the sad picture that shows how miserable life can be if someone is poor should be a very serious impact on the people who need to take action to solve hardship.
Furthermore
, it might make them more nervous and anxious, which is not helpful to them. As a good instance, most eastern Asian countries have a tendency to implement humiliating education in their culture.
That is
 a huge mistake. Ultimately, positive encouragement is much more efficient and useful than negative stimulation. Even though someone has their own perspective on solving scarcity, in any measure, constructive and practical are more recommended for us.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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