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Some people prefer to spend their ;ives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, believed that change is always good thing. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reaons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own expierence.

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Some
people
 do just
one
 thing during their whole
life
 without another different kind of sector.
Thus
 others prefer to try anything they want to do. Both have their own good sides. But I would say
people
 should always make changes in their
life
. Consistency is a good personality that
people
 should have. That's why,
people
 try just
one
 field,
such
 as sport, art, education, culture or science. It gives success in their result,
for example
, I am good at doing gym. So I participated State bodybuilding Championship in 2020 and I was granted a silver medal. Even if doing just
one
 thing is tedious and meaningless, it is the result that I had been consistent. Just the side, working in just
one
 field and administration is the same as
this
.
Therefore
, if
people
 are bored with their work,
this
 is a signal to change something in their
life
.
On the other hand
,
people
 who are always seeking transformation could find their other skill and they could improve it.
Thus
, it becomes
life
 interesting, adventurous and challenging.
Therefore
people
 get to experience many sectors.
For example
, I studied human resources recently and it gives me a good advantage in the workplace. I believe that making changes to our
life
 that improving skills and seeking adventure can make our
life
 fascinating except by doing the same things.
Nevertheless
,
this
 is the own business of every single person.
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