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Some people prefer to spend their ;ives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, believed that change is always good thing. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reaons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own expierence.

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Some
people
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 do just
one
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 thing during their whole
life
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 without another different kind of sector.
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 others prefer to try anything they want to do. Both have their own good sides. But I would say
people
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 should always make changes in their
life
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. Consistency is a good personality that
people
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 should have. That's why,
people
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 try just
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 field,
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 as sport, art, education, culture or science. It gives success in their result,
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, I am good at doing gym. So I participated State bodybuilding Championship in 2020 and I was granted a silver medal. Even if doing just
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 thing is tedious and meaningless, it is the result that I had been consistent. Just the side, working in just
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 field and administration is the same as
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.
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, if
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 are bored with their work,
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 is a signal to change something in their
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.
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,
people
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 who are always seeking transformation could find their other skill and they could improve it.
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, it becomes
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 interesting, adventurous and challenging.
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people
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 get to experience many sectors.
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, I studied human resources recently and it gives me a good advantage in the workplace. I believe that making changes to our
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 that improving skills and seeking adventure can make our
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 fascinating except by doing the same things.
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,
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 is the own business of every single person.
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