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Scientists and technologists are seems to be more valued in society than artists and muscians in what extent do you agree?

#scientists #technologists #society #artists #muscians
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 of mankind, there are
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 of new professions
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occurs
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 needs. It
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 that science and technology
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vital
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role
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society
, and professionals that are in it
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 value to
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society
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artists
 and
musicians
. In
this
 essay, I will argue that
,
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scientists
 and
technologist
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 are very crucial to
the
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society
. A
well developed
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 country or
society
 is based on several factors, I believed
scientists
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technologist
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 are major individuals who develop those factors. As
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 if we take health, day by day
scientists
 searching for new solutions for health issues. they
are
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never give up on their
researches
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 no matter what. Technologists are helping those activities by giving their expertise.
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this
 collaboration, they were able to invent massive inventions that
are help
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 increase
health
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 of not only
human
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 race but animals. Certainly, art and music is a
medium
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that
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through that
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 we can express our feelings and culture but
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in society
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society
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 development aspect,
artists
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 and
musicians
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 participation is less
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scientists
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 and technologists. Most of the
out comes
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artists
 and
musicians
are
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stick to
personals
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artist’s
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artists
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 or
musician’s
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musicians’
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)
believes
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of
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or
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behaviors
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, and other people in
society
 can’t build
logical
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a logical
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connection
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connections
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 between their art or music. To our life. In
fact
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 we can’t agree that
artists
 and
musicians
 can add
a
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value to every
individuals
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 in
the
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society
, as
scientists
 and
technologist
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technologists
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.
Inconclusion
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, a community requires multiple sectors
such
 as
arts
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 music science and technology, But as I argue in the essay, mostly science and technology can develop a community without any limitation.
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