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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 revolution, social
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 stick to
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's lives as their daily diet because most
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 check and update their social
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 not only daily but hourly. In
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, some individuals believe that social
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 have major destructive damage to
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. Nowadays, a smartphone is an essential device in human day-to-day
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 life. There is a number of social networking
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 that can be accessed via smartphone, and most
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 are quite familiar with these
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 because those
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 are easy to
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. Anyone can upload videos, pictures, and voice clips to these
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, especially youtube,Instagram, and Facebook.
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 the main problem, which is we can't trust that
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. Most of the
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,
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 on the social
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 is having zero integrity. As an example there was an economic and political crisis in Sri Lanka, the government had to ban social
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 sites because some individuals spread untruthful news regarding ongoing protests.
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use
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these social
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networks
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network
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 for harassment. Using editing
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, anyone can edit photos, videos, and voice clips and they can share those edited digital materials via social
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. There are a thousand ways to share those forbidden digital materials anonymously,
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fact we can create a fake profile on Facebook using someone’s name and share inappropriate
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, which will damage a real person's reputation. Day by day social media becoming a very powerful tool in
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,
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 can
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 tool either in a good manner or a bad manner. As an example there are many resourceful study groups on Facebook, and there are good learning materials on YouTube , but many
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 don’t have an idea, how deadly is
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 with precaution
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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