Many working people get little or no exercise either during their working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Most of the employees
getting
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less exercise or they
don’t get no
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don’t get any
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time to do exercise
withing
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their working
hours
or after their working
hours
. Having less physical activity is the major cause
for
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many risky
health
drawbacks. With
these
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present world economic
situation
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every human
tend
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to earn money. They invest their free time
also
to earn money but not for their
health
and family. According to
health
researchers
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a human
have
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to balance their daily calorie intake and daily burned
calory
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count,
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excess calories will
stored
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in
human
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body as fat.
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those two ends in
unbalances
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way will
leads
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to obesity, heart problems, high blood sugar and high blood pressure. Sitting on
chair
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for long
hours
and doing two or more
parttime
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jobs, limit the time that people can get exercise. Organizing sports events within
workplace
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the workplace
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is
new
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positive trend, That workforce can involve some physical
activities
during their working
hours
or after their working
hours
. Behalf
of
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after
pandemic
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the pandemic
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most employees work from home. Building
work from home
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setup with Hight adjustable tables,
sitting
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and sitting
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on
yoga
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a yoga
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ball
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can improve physical
activities
during working
hours
. Because it allows
burn
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more calories than
sit
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on
chair
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a chair
the chair
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. With people’s busy life, they will get little physical
activities
which
is
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a
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major
leads
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to serious
health
drawbacks. Joining to
sport
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club or making work from
setup
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the setup
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that can get more physical
activities
will help not only minimize
health
risks but
also
increase
employees
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employees'
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productivity and positive attitudes about
workplace
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the workplace
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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