Many working people get little or no exercise either during their working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?
Most of the employees
getting
less exercise or they Wrong verb form
get
don’t get no
time to do exercise Rewrite the sentence
don’t get any
get no
withing
their working Correct your spelling
within
hours
or after their working Use synonyms
hours
. Having less physical activity is the major cause Use synonyms
for
many risky Change preposition
of
health
drawbacks. With Use synonyms
these
present world economic Correct determiner usage
the
situation
every human Add a comma
,situation
tend
to earn money. They invest their free time Change the verb form
tends
also
to earn money but not for their Linking Words
health
and family.
According to Use synonyms
health
Use synonyms
researchers
a human Add a comma
,researchers
have
to balance their daily calorie intake and daily burned Change the verb form
has
calory
count, Correct your spelling
calorie
Other wise
excess calories will Correct your spelling
Otherwise
stored
in Change the verb form
be stored
human
body as fat. Add an article
the human
Maintain
those two ends in Wrong verb form
Maintaining
unbalances
way will Correct your spelling
unbalanced
leads
to obesity, heart problems, high blood sugar and high blood pressure. Sitting on Change the verb form
lead
chair
for long Add an article
a chair
hours
and doing two or more Use synonyms
parttime
jobs, limit the time that people can get exercise.
Organizing sports events within Correct your spelling
part-time
workplace
is Add an article
the workplace
new
positive trend, That workforce can involve some physical Add an article
a new
activities
during their working Use synonyms
hours
or after their working Use synonyms
hours
. Behalf Use synonyms
of
after Change preposition
apply
pandemic
most employees work from home. Building Correct article usage
the pandemic
work from home
setup with Hight adjustable tables, Add a hyphen
work-from-home
sitting
on Correct word choice
and sitting
yoga
Add an article
a yoga
ball
can improve physical Fix the agreement mistake
balls
activities
during working Use synonyms
hours
. Because it allows Use synonyms
burn
more calories than Change the verb form
burning
sit
on Change the form of the verb
sitting
chair
.
With people’s busy life, they will get little physical Add an article
a chair
the chair
activities
which Use synonyms
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
a
major Correct article usage
apply
leads
to serious Change the noun form
lead
health
drawbacks. Joining to Use synonyms
sport
club or making work from Change the noun form
sports
setup
that can get more physical Add an article
the setup
a setup
activities
will help not only minimize Use synonyms
health
risks but Use synonyms
also
increase Linking Words
employees
productivity and positive attitudes about Change noun form
employees'
employee's
workplace
.Add an article
the workplace
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