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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

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It is believed that the 21st century is an era of digitalization. Each and every sector is becoming digital today so it is considered the best time to be living in history.
Nevertheless
, in my view,
this
 is not the best time and
this
 essay is going to outline my opinion on the same. Time has changed a lot post-pandemic in terms of health. To give a clear example, people were more active in the 1990s and,
as a result
, they never suffered cardiac arrest. We are
also
 switching to a work-from-home culture and
hence
, living a stagnant
life
. Not only that, individuals are becoming miserable and
one
 can blame their social
life
. No
one
 likes to step out of their home and make an effort to build a real connection with real people and end up being alone. Because of the technology advancement, everything is easily accessible through mobile phones. Most of us opt to talk virtually
instead
 of meeting in person. All of these factors are somewhere contributing to a short span and depressing
life
. I strongly believe that
life
 was much more easy and simple back in the 90s. If anyone is going through some
life
 crisis, their neighbours will know about it and
thus
, gives emotional, moral and financial support if needed.
On the contrary
, currently, no
one
 is even aware of their neighbour's names.
Additionally
, children were often seen playing in parks, eating in restaurants, and going out to malls with their families rather than doing all the activities on their phones. It is evident that today's advancement is making people lethargic. In a nutshell, we still need to work on the humongous areas to make it the best era for living. Mental health needs to be given utter importance to improve
life
 quality. Individuals should invest in their social
life
 by meeting their friends and families. Dedicating
one
 hour a day to physical and mental health can add up to a healthy
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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