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Write about the following topic. Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today, we can see that the fast pace development in large business cooperations
such
 as
supermarkets
 has challenged small businesses and they are unable to accept the challenges made by huge
markets
.
Therefore
, there is a potential of closing down the local
markets
 which will affect negatively the
people
 and the business parties. I completely agree will the statement mentioned above and the following essay will elaborate
further
 with examples. Commencing, it is true that
street
 vendors and
street
markets
 are a huge benefit for the native
people
 as the prices in these stalls are affordable for local
people
. Even though local communities are visiting large shopping malls for clothes and other home appliances for glossary shopping they visit the
street
markets
 which give them fresh and clean vegetables and fruits.
Additionally
, the closure of small businesses means
people
 are losing their jobs and new factories will be built up which affects the job market of individuals who are living their lives through daily expenses from the stalls. As an example, due to the pandemic situation in many country local shops has to close down and
people
 were suffering due to the consequences.
Moreover
, farmers face a difficult situation since their products are taken at a cheap price by big companies.
Moreover
,
people
 who are living in areas are unable to access
supermarkets
 which they are used to
street
 business
also
 they are not familiar with the technological advancements in
supermarkets
such
 as Paypal, self counters since they were dealing with cash. In conclusion, I believe that even though there is a plethora of positive factors
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
 visiting
supermarkets
 or shopping malls local stores play a vital role in local communities.
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