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Some people say that completing University education is the best way to get a job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills are important Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #university #education #job #hand #skills
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 era, getting a new career is a big problem for some fresh graduates. the majority of fresh graduates have not upgraded their
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 when in college and the minority have diamond
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 that they got when joining a community at university. in my opinion, for some families being an undergraduate student is a must for their privilege. they think that with a degree they can get a job more easily and get a big salary.
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, 50 per cent of students can get their dream position after their graduation, but for 50 per cent of others is very difficult to get a place for a new experience. in colleges, students have got not only knowledge from lectures but
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 some information that they do not get from senior high school. it will be a foundation for undergraduate students to know the world of work
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, other people think that after graduating from senior high school, continuing studying at university is not a must for some communities, especially for those that have a background ,not from a rich family.
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,
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 makes some teenagers join the community to expand their adaptabilities and relations. by
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 way, when they want to search for an office and join an association, they can easy to get in. because some bosses from a group search for people that have filled the required
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 is because, when their recruit people who have the ability to work, it makes the environment in the company more improved. in conclusion, getting a degree in university is very good to expand knowledge and exercise critical thinking. but if want to get an activity after graduation faster, fresh graduates must fill up their portfolio with good
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 as experience, leadership, communication
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, and time management.
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 it can boost their value to get into a big group with a big salary as their dream
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured learning
  • theoretical knowledge
  • academic credentials
  • networking opportunities
  • real-world application
  • problem-solving
  • teamwork
  • communication skills
  • adaptability
  • internships
  • apprenticeships
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurship
  • long-term career success
  • industries
  • fields
  • balance
  • foundation
  • cultivation
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