More and more wild animals are on the verfe if extinction and other are on the endanger list. what are the reasons for this. what can be done to solve this problem.

There are so many varieties of
animals
across the earth and as we know
in
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a different kind of environment means there will be different kinds of
animals
. as example penguins are supposed to live in cold areas
such
as the north pole and they can't live in
a hot environments
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such
as desert or other tropic areas. but now their existence is under threat. there are some reasons why
this
thing can happen. global warming is one example of why
animals
are on endangered lists. so many forests were felled causing animal's natural habitats to be gone and slowly some types of
animals
cant
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survive and die. global warming
also
causes the original temperature of the earth to rise, and someplace
such
as the north/south poles start to melt.
this
thing can cause some
animals
who live there cannot adapt and they could go. by seeing the reasons above there are some ways we can repair
this
situation. we should build animal conservation, where
animals
are protected there. conservations could
also
be a place to breed varieties
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animals
to multiply their existence. we
also
need to rebuild their habitats and
this
might be the best option to secure wild animal life. by greening their living area that
destroyed
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by humankind,
animals
can live there safely and more naturally like they suppose to live. to conclude, there are so many reasons that can cause wild animal existence
is
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gone but
human
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can still save their life. we can try to make conservation or
to
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rebuild their natural habitats. even though it could take a long time but we can still increase their chance to live.
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