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In some countries, the use of renewable energy sources is being encouraged. Is it a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is an encouragement of using renewable
energy
 in some countries. In my opinion,
this
 is a positive trend. On the one hand, renewable
energy
 is an unlimited source of
energy
 yet
long-term
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 investment. With the rising population pace, it is clear that the demand for
energy
 is now seen rocket;
however
; the amount of fossil fuels
are
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is
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 in short supply and may run out in near future.
Therefore
,more and more people choose renewable
energy
 for cheaper prices and
environmentally-friendly
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environmentally friendly
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.
For example
, in Viet Nam, there are some households
install
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that install
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solar
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a solar
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panel
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panels
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 to generate electricity. Not only they do not need to pay
for
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mothly
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monthly
 electric
bill
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bills
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 but
also
 they can provide
energy
 back to the factories and earn from it.
On the other hand
,
alternatives
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energy
 can be the answer for
limitting
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limiting
 the affection of co2
emission
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emissions
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 to the environment. Fossil fuels
energy
 release a huge amount of Co2
to
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into
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 the environment and contribute its effects on the
the
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global warming.
Therefore
, opting for alternative forms of
energy
such
 as solar or wind power will help to reduce
the
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apply
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emission and improve air equality. Harnessing the sun for its
energy
 is one of
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the efficent
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efficent
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efficient
 methods that has been recommended by governments. In conclusion, the essay
support
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supports
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 the positive of renewable
energy
 due to
environment
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environmental
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 purposes and long-term investment purposes.
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