In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or diasgree?

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that in marriages nowadays, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. I support
this
statement because l think that each people should have their own money. It
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them be more productive, confident and comfortable. People can
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their family members, and buy everything
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way want. But I think that the father of the family should take care of the family, he has to earn for housing and food. I
also
believe that a
man
should provide for a woman during pregnancy, as it can be difficult for a woman to go to work at
this
time.
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a
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, takes care of a girl, he should pay the bill in a restaurant, take care,
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. These are my personal opinions and I would be pleased to see
such
a
man
next
to me, it would give me a sense of protection. But at the same time, I believe that a woman should earn money herself,
then
she will be able to manage her money herself,
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her little dreams, and let's
also
give nice gifts to her
man
.
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