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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between citles. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is claimed by several
people
 governments ought to allocate most of their budget to new railway lines for very fast
trains
 between cities.
Besides
this
, some
people
believes
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 that money should be spent on improving existing public
transport
instead
 of fast
trains
. I totally agree with the former and would like to highlight various advantages and drawbacks of encouraging the development of train
systems
. I agree because of 2 major reasons.
Firstly
, safety is really important on the road and railways while
people
traveling
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travel
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 to school,
work
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and work
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 on
regular
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a regular
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 basis.
For instance
, drivers should concentrate
to
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on
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road
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the road
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extremly
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extremely
 when they are
on
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in
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 traffic, not just
avoid
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 accidents but
also
prevent
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 other drivers from causing problems on the road.
High speed
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 rails
has
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oto
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to
 control by high technologies which
allows
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 driving professional control.
Secondly
, some
people
 prefer to live
further
 and
further
 away from city centres where land and house
more
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are more
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 affordable.
High speed
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 rail allows
to
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apply
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these
communters
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commuters
 to travel
greater
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a greater
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distance
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distances
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 in a shorter amount of time.
In addition
 to
this
,
trafic
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traffic
jam
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jams
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 reduce roads delay while
caused
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least
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the least
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 air
polllutants
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pollutants
with
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in
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this
 way.
On the other hand
, fast
trains
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are significantlly
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significantlly
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significantly
expensive,
some
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and some
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 believe that
this
 money could
be spend
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be spent
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 on repairing and renovating transportation
systems
 which
is already exist
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already exist
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. Another possibility
also
goverments
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governments
government
 could allocate their budgets to build more
trains
 and buses to service the ever-expanding urban population.
Moreover
, boats and ferries could benefit from a budget which focuses more on existing forms of
transport
. In conclusion, I would like to firmly agree with the suggestion of constructing new rail lines for very fast
trains
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systems
 in
comprison
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comparison
 to improving existing train
systems
. Public
transport
 is
a
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 issue which affects us all. The taxes which we pay should be spent on the type of
transport
 which will have the most benefit to all citizens.
In addition
, we need to take into account how much
th
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the
 environment is damaged by fossil fuels and pollution.
Therefore
, I believe in order to move forward, we need to embrace the idea of
high speed
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high-speed
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 rail so that
futue
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future
 generations can continue to live safely and efficiently.
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