In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between citles. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is claimed by several

people

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governments ought to allocate most of their budget to new railway lines for very fast

trains

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between cities.

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, some

people

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believes

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that money should be spent on improving existing public

transport

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instead

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of fast

trains

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. I totally agree with the former and would like to highlight various advantages and drawbacks of encouraging the development of train

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. I agree because of 2 major reasons.

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, safety is really important on the road and railways while

people

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basis.

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traffic, not just

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accidents but

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other drivers from causing problems on the road.

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control by high technologies which

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driving professional control.

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prefer to live

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away from city centres where land and house

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affordable.

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rail allows

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these

communters

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commuters

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distance

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in a shorter amount of time.

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reduce roads delay while

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pollutants

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way.

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, fast

trains

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are significantlly

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significantly

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some

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believe that

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money could

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on repairing and renovating transportation

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which

is already exist

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. Another possibility

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goverments

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governments

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could allocate their budgets to build more

trains

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and buses to service the ever-expanding urban population.

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, boats and ferries could benefit from a budget which focuses more on existing forms of

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. In conclusion, I would like to firmly agree with the suggestion of constructing new rail lines for very fast

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trains

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systems

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comprison

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comparison

to improving existing train

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. Public

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issue which affects us all. The taxes which we pay should be spent on the type of

transport

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which will have the most benefit to all citizens.

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, we need to take into account how much

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the

environment is damaged by fossil fuels and pollution.

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, I believe in order to move forward, we need to embrace the idea of

high speed

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rail so that

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future

generations can continue to live safely and efficiently.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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