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The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays people argue whether safe goods transportation can be achieved only by the drivers being tested on a regular basis. I partially agree with
this
 statement as there are other factors which need to be considered. To support the main idea,
such
measure
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 as periodic testing of driving competency may indeed help to decrease the car
accidents
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accident
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 rate due to careless driving of a vehicle. Despite a great and seasoned practice of being a chauffeur for many years, it is quite
naturally
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 to forget certain rules and regulations, so passing the test gives an excellent opportunity to refresh the knowledge of road
behavior
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 in order to avoid car crashes, prevent any possible harm and deliver the items in a proper condition. By doing
this
 there is a guarantee of safe travel for all the traffic participants.
On the other hand
, not only would the implementation of a yearly basis verification for the drivers require a great amount of time and effort, as it is physically impossible to administer an exam to everyone who has a driving license, but
also
 causes grand expenses.
Besides
, not always the driver the one who is guilty in an accident. There is
such
 an external factor as weather, which may cause poor visibility or slippery roads, that might be the reason for the mishap. To conclude,
although
such
 a proposal is well-intentioned, it is difficult to implement and seems to be inefficient.
Therefore
, more viable options should be explored.
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