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Some parents think that the latest technologies (gadgets, computers, etc.) will help in their child's learning development. Others think giving children the latest gadgets will be a distraction in their studies. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Give specific details and examples in your answer.

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 they can take pictures of notes using their phones in class to memorise. Obviously, mobile technologies give more opportunities for effective education.
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 they can install games on their smartphones or watch videos.
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