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Fast-food restaurants are becoming more popular than ever all over the world. What are the possible causes and effects of this phenomenon

#fast-food #restaurants #world #effects #phenomenon
It is true that
,
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the trend of eating junk
food
 is becoming popular among all generations worldwide. There are various possible causes why they like to eat outside, and
forwards
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the
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all mankind towards
the
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 sedentary lifestyle.
Firstly
, I would like
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 about the reason's why
they
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these restaurants
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are favorable
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favorable
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, foremost is they provide
variety
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 of
food
 options
in
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 their menu so you can easily choose your option and the taste and quality of
food
 is
also
 another thing why they like to eat
fast-
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fast food
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food
.
Secondly
,
easy to order
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 or
home
 delivery
option
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also
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 the major reason it's so convenient for
young
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 generation or even in orders to
order
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the
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food
 online and they will drop .
For instance
,
their
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 are so many
food
 apps like Uber
eat
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,doors dash,
skip
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and skip
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 they provide
home
 service
frome
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from
food
 shops to
home
 .
Last
 but not least, Due to hectic schedules, many
of
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people all around the world are working hard so they
have
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 not enough time to cook the
food
 so they prefer to
pic
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pick
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 the
food
 on the way
of
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 work through
drive
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the drive
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 through which
also
save
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 the time .
On the other hand
 , everything has
their
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 own drawback , the topmost is they are leading to the sedentary
life style
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lifestyle
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so
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,which put harmful effects on human
beings
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beings'
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 health .
for example
, less physical activity or no cooking at
home
also
 make them
more
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lazy or they get obesity which
also
 causes so many health problems
such
 as high blood pressure, diabetes so on.
The
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another effects
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another effect
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 will be
goes
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 to our environment,
alot
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a lot
 of
food
 packaging paper and plastic make the whole planet polluted. IN CONCLUSION,
they
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the
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consume
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a
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of fast-
food
 stuff is
increase
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 dramatically all over the world because of some
mention
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reason
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. I would like to say that people should manage their timetable to get time to cook
food
 themselves at
home
 which is more delicious and fresh .
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