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Challenges of Cyber Security Laws and policies regarding Human Rights Laws.

#challenges #cyber #security #laws #policies #rights
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In recent times, the Digital
Security
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Act
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 2018 has been a controversial topic of discussion in the country, with
citizens
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 taking to social media to express their discontent. The hashtag “Abolish Digital
Security
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Act
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, 2018” has been trending, with people creating posters and infographics in opposition to the
Act
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. (Footnote) The current
government
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 of
Bangladesh
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 under Prime Minister Sheikh Hasina introduced the vision of Digital
Bangladesh
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 by 2021. From the vision of Digital
Bangladesh
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, governments encourage their
citizens
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 to communicate and work through the internet for improving development. Since
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Bangladesh
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 is becoming successful in the IT sector, from the city corporation to villages internet facilities are spread out and become available with the help of the public and private stakeholders. The digitalization of the country is important as important to maintain secure its
citizens
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 in cyberspace. On that note, the
Government
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 of
Bangladesh
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 passed a
law
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 in 2018 to ensure digital
security
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 and prevent crimes committed on digital platforms, Digital
Security
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Act
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, 2018. When the draft of the
act
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 came into public, many Critics, Human Rights Defenders
,
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 and media people found
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law
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as
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 a Draconian
Law
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that is
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 repressive, harsh, and biased. During the pandemic Covid-19, the cases under
this
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act
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 increased unbelievably. In the
first
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 five months of 2020, 403 cases were filed and 353 arrests were made under the
Act
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, report says most of them are human rights activists, journalists, and political critics who
were
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criticized
against
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the local
MP’s
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MPsand
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,
failure
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the failure
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 of the
government
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. Particularly the Digital
Security
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Act
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, 2018 is contradictory with existing national laws,
human
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and human
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 rights laws, and
unconstitutional
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, ambiguous, and poorly organized. It criminalizes 20 activities on digital platforms, of which 14 are non-bailable and ambiguous biased, and extremely punishable. The
government
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 of
Bangladesh
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governing
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 the online freedom of
citizens
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 under
this
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law
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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