Study shows that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison, so that they can get a job when they leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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of
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from their childhood.
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money .some of dwellers believes that if we provide
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criminals they can start their new life with
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education
. I totally agree with the former point of view.
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, I would like to explain my opinion because
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some
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youngsters
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the youngsters
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commit
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due to financial reasons and family problems they have no criminal background as well
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be a good opportunity for them to get
education
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a new lifestyle with their family.
Secondly
, they will get a chance to
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from offending if they have skill knowledge of some business they can start over with
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business and make a new reputation in public.
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, they can provide a good future or
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reputation
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life to
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upcoming generation.
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,some people are disappointed with
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statement, because they believe criminal can not change their
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they are
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society. People believe that they should
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separate
from society because its put
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on children.
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instance
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it gives
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to
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peoples
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can do
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they can live in society
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freedom
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with respect after
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some
education
or skill knowledge. To sum
this
all up, according to
me
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this
is a good idea to give
education
to the criminal behind the wall so they learn through books and put the knowledge in their real lives to become
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their career.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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