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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Authorities should invest more funds
on
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train
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instead
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 of roadways. Personally , I completely agree with
this
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 essay statement because
railways
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 are the cheapest mode of transport as well as
great
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 mode of
economy
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 for regimes.
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with
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 the fact that why I believe that
governments
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 should allocate
money
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 to
railways
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 because
the
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train
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 tickets are not expensive and everyone can afford to travel by
rails
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rail
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.Thousands of people are
traveling
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 on trains every day because trains are faster ,
passengers
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and passengers
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 can reach
at
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their destination on time without causing any delay .
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 , recent studies show that
travelers
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travellers
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 save
one -
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one-third
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third
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 of
time
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 when they are
traveling
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 by
trains
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train
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.
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 ,
governments
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 should spend
money
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 on
railways
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 . Another main reason is that regimes make a huge amount of
money
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 in the form of
train
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 tickets.
Governments
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 earn millions of
money
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 through rail services and
further
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it
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 to build new pathways . As a consequence,
governments
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 receive more profit even by spending minor funds for improving
train
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 infrastructure .
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 , studies show that
governments
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 are earning ten times the initial amount of
money
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 that had
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spent on rail improvements. In conclusion, I strongly believe that regimes should allocate more funds
on
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railways
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 in order to earn more
money
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 and provide facilities to their
nation
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 residents.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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