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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
Authorities should invest more funds
on
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train
 lines
instead
 of roadways. Personally , I completely agree with
this
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railways
 are the cheapest mode of transport as well as
great
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 mode of
economy
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 for regimes.
To begin
with
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 the fact that why I believe that
governments
 should allocate
money
 to
railways
 because
the
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train
 tickets are not expensive and everyone can afford to travel by
rails
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.Thousands of people are
traveling
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 on trains every day because trains are faster ,
passengers
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and passengers
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 can reach
at
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their destination on time without causing any delay .
For example
 , recent studies show that
travelers
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 save
one -
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one-third
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third
 of
time
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the time
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 when they are
traveling
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 by
trains
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.
Therefore
 ,
governments
 should spend
money
 on
railways
 . Another main reason is that regimes make a huge amount of
money
 in the form of
train
 tickets.
Governments
 earn millions of
money
 through rail services and
further
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it
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 to build new pathways . As a consequence,
governments
 receive more profit even by spending minor funds for improving
train
 infrastructure .
For instance
 , studies show that
governments
 are earning ten times the initial amount of
money
 that had
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spent on rail improvements. In conclusion, I strongly believe that regimes should allocate more funds
on
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railways
 in order to earn more
money
 and provide facilities to their
nation
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 residents.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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