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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#internet #communication #people #place #information
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 fact, the
internet
 has an excellent function in terms of
media
 communication while there are some
people
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 that the
Internet
 has no good place in order to find
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relevant
information
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 two notions. The presence of the
internet
 has given us the easiest way to communicate with
the
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other
people
 without
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 directly. Way back when, there is a fact that we have to
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a traditional tools
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such
 as letters, or even used animals
such
 as doves and horses in order to send emails to others. That was a completely hard
media
 communicator since the use of conventional tools to send mail might be distracted by the weather.
As a result
, the mail may not be received by the
people
. These conditions show us the advantage of the presence of the
internet
. We are now easiest to use the
internet
 to send emails or even more voice mail and pictures through the
internet
. Once we surf
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the
internet
, it will give us several options in terms of
media
 communications
such
 as TikTok, Instagram, and so on. Those are the several examples of
media
 communication that are available on the
internet
, and by those applications,
people
 now are an easy to make conversation without meeting anymore.
On the other hand
, the
internet
 may not be the best place to look the relevant
information
 because the
information
 were not 100% true since it
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 easiest for
people
 to upload
the
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information
 and all things to the
internet
 based on their perceptions. The
internet
 has no filtering tools in order to filter
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accurate
information
.
Thus
, the
people
 who use those kinds of misconduct
information
 will lead
them
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to misleading
information
. That will be the disadvantage of using the
internet
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media
information
. To conclude,
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using
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the
internet
 will give us a positive advantage in terms of
media
 communication while
,
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 on the other side
the
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using
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the
internet
 for finding relevant
information
 may be not suggested since
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inaccurate
information
 are available.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Democratize access
  • Instant messaging
  • Real-time conversations
  • Credible sources
  • Misinformation
  • Unverified facts
  • Reputable news outlets
  • Biased opinions
  • Algorithm-driven content
  • Overreliance
  • Traditional methods
  • Search engines
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