Financial education should be mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do ou agree or disagree with this statement ?

Nowadays, financial knowledge has become a basis for people as it is related to our daily spending behaviour. I totally agree that the course should be required in school. In
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To begin
with, money is in our lives throughout the day from grocery shopping, dining,
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trasportation
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commute to investment regardless of the format
such
as paper, credit card or online. As so,
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spending and saving behaviours should be seeded at
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young age to nurture the careful spending habit.
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, when they grow up, the traits of
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smart spending behaviours will
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related
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to country household debts . The higher of bad debts, the less financial stability the country
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facing. Of course, we do not want to see that bankrupt situation happen to
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next
generations.
Furthermore
, learning finance at
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age
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not just only learn how to spend and save, but they
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learn how to grow
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revenue wisely. We have seen many investors that became successful millionaires at
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age. One of the most important is because they have studied finance-related subjects,
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accounting, economics, or investment, through books or courses. In my opinion, it would be better if these courses are adjusted and taught
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students
from the classrooms. Starting from small scales of
students
in classes, the result will lead to affect
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macro scale of the economy. In conclusion, finance education should be required as a fundamental course for
students
. It is beneficial not just to the
students
but
also
to the country's economic situation.
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