 Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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how
road
safety
should be improved. Some believe that harsh punishment should be used, but some believe that other
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would be more effective. These two
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has different interesting points that would be covered in
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First
of all, strict punishment is
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part of
road
safety
law.
For example
, fines for a light offence and
imprisonement
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imprisonment
for a heavier offence. Nobody likes being punished so when they do it would make them don't want to repeat the same mistake. As for
another driver
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, they would
driver
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more
carefuly
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carefully
in fear of making a punishable offence. Another idea is enforcing traffic
safety
through
a
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more subtle means.
For example
, encouraging
vehicle
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to drive slower in a denser
area
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by using signs. Another method is by reducing
road
width as people tend to drive slower
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a narrow
road
,
thus
reducing the lethality of an accident. Adequate training for both driving
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and discipline would
also
make the
road
safer for everyone. In the
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both
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are
important
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part
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of enforcing
road
safety
. The two could be implemented side by side and should not be compared as they complement each other.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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