Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as the Sahara desert and Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages of visiting this area?
Currently,
places
where unusual areas are difficult like Sahara
desert and Antarctica are visited by a large number of visitors. In Correct article usage
the Sahara
this
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I will right Add a comma
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advantages
and Correct article usage
the advantages
disadvantage
of visiting Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
these destination
.
There are some disadvantages Change the determiner
this destination
these destinations
of
exploring Change preposition
to
places
which are unique. The first
one is the problems of the
health. Take Correct article usage
apply
for example
my
brother. Even though he grew up Add the comma(s)
,my
one
of the coldest countries he decided to visit Change preposition
in one
Sahara
desert. After they went there he got sick because of the hot condition. Correct article usage
the Sahara
Therefore
he went back home because there was no hospital and
hotel. The Correct word choice
or
second
one is too risky to survive because they are not controlled by any government. Approximately 11 years ago there was attack
Add an article
an attack
the attack
to
Change preposition
on
the
group of tourists in Correct article usage
a
Kizilkum
desert by predatory animals which were dangerous. Correct article usage
the Kizilkum
As a result
, through
many Change preposition
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
Correct article usage
the visitor
visitor
Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
survive
about Wrong verb form
survived
Correct article usage
a tree
tree
or tour of them were killed.
There are many advantages of visiting Correct your spelling
three
places
which are hard survive
. People could see something beautiful and amazing. Fix the infinitive
to survive
For instance
, last
year my parents explored Antarctica with the
group of visitors. They saw huge mountains and took a photo. The most amazing thing is that they saw water creatures like killer whales and others. As a Correct article usage
a
consequences
, though is very cold there Correct the article-noun agreement
consequence
this
trip was such
an experience for them.
In conclusion, I think that it has its own pluses and minuses but it depends on visiting places
where condition
are difficult because not all people have the qualities of an optimist.Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
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