Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as the Sahara desert and Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages of visiting this area?

Currently,
places
where unusual areas are difficult like
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desert and Antarctica are visited by a large number of visitors. In
this
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advantages
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and
disadvantage
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of visiting
these destination
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. There are some disadvantages
of
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exploring
places
which are unique. The
first
one is the problems of
the
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health. Take
for example
my
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brother. Even though he grew up
one
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of the coldest countries he decided to visit
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desert. After they went there he got sick because of the hot condition.
Therefore
he went back home because there was no hospital
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hotel. The
second
one is too risky to survive because they are not controlled by any government. Approximately 11 years ago there was
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the
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group of tourists in
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desert by predatory animals which were dangerous.
As a result
,
through
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many
of
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the visitor
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visitor
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survive
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about
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or tour of them were killed. There are many advantages of visiting
places
which are hard
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. People could see something beautiful and amazing.
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,
last
year my parents explored Antarctica with
the
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group of visitors. They saw huge mountains and took a photo. The most amazing thing is that they saw water creatures like killer whales and others. As a
consequences
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, though is very cold there
this
trip was
such
an experience for them. In conclusion, I think that it has its own pluses and minuses but it depends on visiting
places
where
condition
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are difficult because not all people have the qualities of an optimist.
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