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Learning English at school is more often seen as more important than learning a local language .If these are not taught ,many are at a risk of dying out.

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Nowadays, learning
English
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 at school is often seen as more important than learning local
languages
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. Some
people
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 say that there is a risk that local
languages
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 dying out. The whole world is using
English
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 to communicate
beetwen
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between
 countries. We can
called
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call
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English
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as
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an
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 international
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languages
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language
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. Our local
languages
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 are equally important as
English
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. We can not forget about them.
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,
ability
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the ability
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 to use
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 allows
people
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 to make new friends all around
world
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the world
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, gain new
experience
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experiences
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 travelling or gain knowledge
reading
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by reading
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a
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apply
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various
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of
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articles and books. Learning
languages
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 at school is very important for
people
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 to develop. As we know, children have
better
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a better
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 ability to learn. The sooner they start, the better their
English
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 will be in the future.
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,
people
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 have
a
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different needs. Great American psychologist, Maslow, created
a pyramids
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pyramids
a pyramid
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 where he
identifed
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identified
 basic needs which
people
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 should satisfy to grow up well. One of them is a sense of belonging. It means that
people
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 feel well when they are a part of a group. Society in some
country
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countries
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 can be
this
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 group of
people
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 who differ in traditions and language.
That is
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 the
reasons
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reason
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 why we have to care about our native
languages
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. They give us a sense of belonging. To sum up,
English
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 is very important because allows us to communicate with the world and expand our horizons. Native
languages
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 are not less important. They are a thing
who
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that
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 sets us apart from
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others. The best solution is
speaking
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to speak
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 fluently in
English
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 and
also
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 in
national
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the national
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 language.
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