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Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#shops #food #drinks #people’s #health
Nowadays, most
of
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people
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the people
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 carefully select some
products
. In 21-century
people
faced
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with
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a lot of problems,
for
instance
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 some new viruses, covid-19 and etc. so
people
try
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 take very good care of their
health
. some of them really
thinks
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 that shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven. In my view, before
to sell
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 any food or drink, these
products
 should have been scientifically proven, because it is really important to know what we eat or drink, it is important for our
health
. Some
people
 in our country have
problem
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problems
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 with their
health
, so obviously they have to
monitoring
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 their diet, but it depends on the
products
, how
to
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people
 can monitor their diet system
,
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 if we doubt the quality of some
products
? So
that is
 why, in my
opinion
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 some of the
products
 have been scientifically proven for sure.
On the other hand
, it is not always
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products
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 fault. Sometimes
people
 could not just check the expiration date of the product and
then
 eat it.
However
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 it leads to various intestinal diseases. One way to tackle
this
 is to check the expiration date before buying it.
By doing
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this
 it will help
to
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you to
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 take very well care of your
health
.
this
 solution would hopefully prevent
people
 from
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problem
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problems
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 with
health
 because it is
good
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 way
take
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 care of your diet system. In conclusion,
to check
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 the expiration date of
the
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any product is effective and dealing with the issue. If
people
 implemented these solution problem with
health
 would soon become less acute.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Regulations
  • accountability
  • retailers
  • public health
  • consumer choice
  • diet
  • banning
  • health education
  • awareness campaigns
  • economic impact
  • job losses
  • small businesses
  • complexity
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • quantity consumed
  • individual health conditions
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