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In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both
spouses
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 to earn a living for the family. In my opinion, it is not always true. Because we live in different countries and sometimes it
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 on the
spouses
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, they can decide
this
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 question together. I tend to agree with the view that both
of
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spouses
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 earn a living for the family
,
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 if they want. But if
the
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both
spouses
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 want to have
a
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children
a child
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children
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a
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 near future, I am convinced that they should earn for good and independent
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children
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 lives. Because
,
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 it is
really
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 great responsibility for parents. If they want that their
children
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 will live in good and comfortable conditions they must create these conditions for them. Another reason why I disagree
that
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 sometimes
female
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females
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 or
male
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males
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 who
do
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 not earn a living for the family should take care of housework, looking after
a
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children
a child
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children
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, cooking
and
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etc. Because they stay at home and must
to
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do housework even their partner
earn
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earns
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 for the family. But they must
to
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discuss before they became
spouses
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 that will they earn together rot the family or
one
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if one
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 of them
do
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 not work because the salary or revenue will be enough for living. In conclusion, even though one of the
spouses
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 do not work and earn it
is does
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 not matter, if
the
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one of the
partner
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partners
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earn
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 enough for the family.
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