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The best way to solve world’s environment problem is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion.

#world’s #environment #cost #fuel
Currently
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 earth is in
dangerous
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a dangerous
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 period of time. one of the biggest
concern
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 is the air
condition
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 in many
nation
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 is in
horrible
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 situation.
goverments
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governments
government
 in many
country
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 were trying to increase the
cost
 of
fuel
 to improve the existing situation. in my opinion
this
 is not the best way to solve the problem I strongly believe
eventhough
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even though
goverment
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government
 multiple the
cost
 of
fuel
, there are still many people
willingly
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 to buy
the
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fuel
 for their
vehicle
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vehicles
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.
this
 solution will only make the business owner of
this
 area
getting
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 richer while the main problem isn't solved.
this
 way
also
 will worsen for people in some areas
such
 as in some
country
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countries
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 in
africa
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Africa
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 or
asia
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Asia
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. as we know
fuel
 is rare in some
part
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parts
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 of rural
area
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areas
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 in some
country
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countries
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 or sometimes it can be really expensive if we compare the price with
other main area
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another main area
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.
however
, rather than increasing the
cost
 of
fuel
,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should focus on creating
an
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new energy or
use
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other kind
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another kind
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 of energy
that is
 better for
environment
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the environment
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.
for example
, developing
a electric vehicles
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electric vehicles
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.
this
 will reduce the amount of
polution
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pollution
that is
 created by ordinary cars.
this
also
 will help people to decrease their expense for gas
fuel
, as we know that electric
fuel
 is cheaper than gas
fuel
. overall,
i
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I
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 disagree that
by
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increasing
cost
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the cost
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 of
fuel
 is effective enough to solve
this
environment
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environmental
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 problem. there is a better way to help restore
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the earth
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earth
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 condition.
for
example
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maximazing
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maximizing
 alternative energy
such
 as electric for
vehicle
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vehicles
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 or
factory
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factories
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 to suppress
amount
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the amount
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 of
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pollution
polution
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pollution
that is
 usually created
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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