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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case?Do you think thi is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, with the development of technology, people especially the young have incorporated mostly all facilities made up of these technologies into their lives. One most common is the smartphone which takes most day hours to work with. In
this
 essay, I will argue that
although
 it is not the thing we can run away from it has both positive and negative aspects. We all know there are many different applications and software on our smartphones. In terms of
children
, I believe their expenditure of time and energy is associated with social media
such
 as Instagram, Facebook etc. Using social media leads them to have more self-confidence by covering their not much likeable characteristics or appearance. They
also
 make friends with other unreal individuals which helps them feel loveable
in contrast
 with what happens in their real life. Due to the frantic pace of life, parents do not have enough time to spend on their
children
's needs
thus
, they are enticed into what virtual reality provides. In some cases,
children
 are encouraged to play the role of a self-reliable, tactful and well-liked person whom they are not,
therefore
 they experience a feeling of being themselves with their virtual friends or find it in playing games. A study has been conducted in one of the United States universities and claims that playing games make the heirs close to what they really are. In order to name some advantages, I should indicate that for doing their homework
children
 need to research and study so they easily can google whatever they should know.
Furthermore
, in the case that printed books and magazines have become less common, they can use online libraries to search various ranges of books with no limitations. In conclusion, after
this
 essay has manifested the above-mentioned points, it should be iterated that
although
 using smartphones has occupied
children
 most hours of the day, it has both advantages and disadvantages. In order to mitigate the problems caused by excessive use of it, parents should control what they do with their smartphones.
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