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You would like to invite your friend from abroad to a public event in your country. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter describe the public event explain why you think he/she would like the event write how you can help your friend with accommodation

#friend #event #country #accommodation
Dear Joy, great to hear from you, I am glad everything going well for you. I just writing to you to invite
to
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 the Christmas carnival in my town. Our schoolmates are coming for
this
 event and it will be a get-together for our old friends. We are planning to stay in my parent's home, which has enough rooms and facilities for all of us. The main attraction of the carnival is the food festival, there are several restaurants and cafes that are participating
this
 year including Indian, Chinese, Arabic and vegetarian foods are the main attraction in
this
 festival. As a foodie, you will enjoy it. There is
also
 some cultural programs and music night are conducting in the carnival. tribes music is the highlighted item and
the
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famous musicians are coming to conduct the musical nights. I have attached the program brochure along with
this
 letter. Let me update your flight details,
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 will pick you up from the airport I can't wait to see you with love Hasna
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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