Some people say that protecting the environment is the governments responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is said that only
governments
should be responsible/ accountable for solving
environment
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environmental
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problems
as well as the measures
be
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done to protect the ecosystem, whereas others argue that all citizens should take
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responsibility.
This
essay will elucidate the opposing statements in depth as well as my own standpoint. On the one hand,
governments
can spend nations' expenses on protecting
environment
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the environment
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. To protect
environment
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the environment
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,
for example
, some projects or
researches
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research
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are needed especially for
nature
poor regions, which are the dessert or destroyed forests, and polluting
area
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areas
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, which are
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an ocean
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ocean
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oceans
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with
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full of chemical products,
garbage
, and so on, these actions can be held only by
governments
because of money.
For instance
, the Japanese
government
invested
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in the
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the
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project which tries to produce
the
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device of generation energy by using hydrogen, and it takes
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cost
of
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2 trillion yen.
In addition
,
government
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the government
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can make a restriction for keeping
nature
cleanly
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to
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not only individuals, which have to pay tax for throwing oversized
garbage
, but
also
company
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companies
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, especially
factory
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factories
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, which are restricted or paid tax to emit carbon oxide and drain polluted water
up
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to a certain amount. If critical
environment
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problems
, which
is
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about destroying
globe
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the globe
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, have occurred,
government
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the government
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have more possibility to prevent
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nature
from
destroyers
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being destroyers
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due to using regulations or spending money than
people
.
On the other hand
, If individuals do not have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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to preserve
nature
, the earth's destroying speed would become faster. The main reason that environmental destruction
such
as deforestation is
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human's
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behaviors
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behaviours
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.
For example
, the 2 causes of ocean pollution are the chemical materials produced by
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the manufacturer
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manufacturer
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manufacturers
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, and
garbage
like plastics
throwed
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thrown
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by citizens. The irresponsibility of individuals would prompt
people
to throw
garbage
everywhere, drain or emit
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harmful subsistence.
However
, if
people
have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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to protect
nature
, their consciousness
to
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of
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earth
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the earth
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would be changed
to
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for
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the better. In Japan,
people
did not have
the
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attention to
emvironmental
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environmental
problems
because
government
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the government
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did not incorporate these
problems
to
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into
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the
curricurums
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curriculum
curriculums
.
However
, a decade later, as rising the attention of
environment
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the environment
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all over the world,
Japanese
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government
cannnot
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cannot
longer ignore these
problems
and they have
tuckeled
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tackled
and
teach
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people
these issues. Thanks to the
government
's
endeavor
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, young
people
have the awareness to protect
nature
. In a recent
servey
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survey
in Japan, many
youth
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tend to select
the
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products which are made
by
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eco-friend materials. In conclusion, while the existence of
governments
would be helpful to protect
nature
, citizens have to be responsible for conserving
environment
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as well
as
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governments
, and the better attitudes of humans to
environment
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the environment
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would become a key factor to
reserve
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preserve
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nature
for a long time.
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