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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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It is true that residents would rather dwell in their own houses.
However
, it is becoming more popular to lease a property in many modern counties. The following essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of rental with proper examples.
To begin
 with, the most noticeable disadvantage is that
instead
 of paying a mortgage, families are losing their money on leasing. As it is better to spend the same amount of money per month to pay
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the bank.
Secondly
, individuals who rent usually cannot have a pet in a house because if it damages something there will be a need to pay for it.
Moreover
, the landlord creates a lot of rules which you need to obey.
On the other hand
, the huge advantage for renters is that they can live near their work because it saves time and money on transportation. Meanwhile, some individuals are forced to buy a semi-detached house or a terraced one, because the prices for detached houses are way higher. As low-priced houses are usually located in
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 suburbs, people prefer to rent in neighbourhoods with better schools and a high safety rate.
For example
, in
Melbourne
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 many individuals are leasing in the eastern part of the city because it is considered the more developed and cleaner side.
Therefore
, prices vary from 3 million to 30 million AUD.
Hence
, citizens prefer to rent a property which has more benefits. To conclude
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the aforementioned arguments, I firmly believe that the advantages of renting outweigh the drawbacks even if people have restrictions and do not own their homes.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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