some people say the main way to be happy in life to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? what other things in life can make people happy? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The table illustrates the numbers and percentages of

households

living in

poverty

in Australia, in 1999, segmented by household

types

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. In general,

single parent

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single-parent

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households

had the highest

poverty

percentage in comparison to aged

couples

which had the lowest percentage. 21

percent

single parent

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single-parent

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households

, amounting to 787878 homes were living in

poverty

as of 1999.

This

was closely followed by

single person

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households

at 19

percent

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Couples

with children and without followed at 12 and 7

percent

respectively with aged

households

being the least affected by

poverty

. All in all, aged homes were the least affected by

poverty

. The table shows that there were 3 times more single people

households

poverty

as compared to

single aged

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people, whose

poverty

rate was at 6% proportion.

Similarly

aged

couples

had a lesser proportion of

poverty

at 4

percent

, in comparison to single

couples

at 7

percent

. In all, 11

percent

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per cent

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of all

households

in Australia in the given year were living in

poverty

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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164 words

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Financial security
Basic needs
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Luxury
Freedom
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Physical well-being
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Community involvement
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some people say the main way to be happy in life to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? what other things in life can make people happy? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

It is important for everyone including young people to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The global demand for oil and gas is increasing. Some believe that we should therefore encourage the exploitation of remote areas. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people believe that computers and the internet are more important to a child’s education than schools and teachers. However, others argue that schools and teachers play a more important role in the education of children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.