Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Some
people
think that increasing the price
of sugary foods and drinks leads to a decline in consumption
of these types of foods. While others, myself included, have a different point of view about Correct article usage
the consumption
this
.
On the one hand, according to the economy
theory, there is an inverse relationship between Replace the word
economic
products
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products'
product's
price
and demand for them. In other words
, whenever the price
of the
one good is Correct article usage
apply
being
increased, Unnecessary verb
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people
's tendencies
for purchasingFix the agreement mistake
tendency
,
will start to decline. Remove the comma
apply
As a result
, the consumption
of that product will be decreased during
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over
the
time. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, a peculiar sugary drink which its
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whose
price
was 1$ last
year, this
year, because of some new regulations which are introduced by the government, is raised. So, its consumption
is being dropped.
On the other hand
, there are some reasons that this
policy does not effect
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affect
on
the amount of Change preposition
apply
consumption
. Firstly
, most of
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apply
people
cannot change their diet habits owing to the high cost. By Add an article
the people
this
I mean, when price
of a product raise, not only they do not decrease their demand but Add an article
the price
also
, they adopt
themselves to new circumstances. Correct your spelling
adapt
Furthermore
, the vital role of willpower should not be overlooked. It means, having a healthy diet requires a
regular practice which Correct article usage
apply
do
not be affected Change the verb form
does
under
any condition. Change preposition
by
For instance
, someone who has a
poor willpower, and loves sugary food, even if prices of these foods will be raised, Remove the article
apply
he
might not be declined Correct pronoun usage
apply
consumption
.
To sum up, in my opinion, there are some reasons that
the enhancing Correct word choice
why
price
of some products which are sugary cannot contribute to decreasing their usages
. Reasons Fix the agreement mistake
usage
such
as people
adaptation and poor Change noun form
people's
will-power
are two of the prominent ones.Correct your spelling
willpower
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