Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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think that increasing the

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of sugary foods and drinks leads to a decline in

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consumption

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of these types of foods. While others, myself included, have a different point of view about

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theory, there is an inverse relationship between

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price

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and demand for them.

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of

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one good is

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increased,

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's

tendencies

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for purchasing

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will start to decline.

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, the

consumption

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of that product will be decreased

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the

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time.

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, a peculiar sugary drink

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price

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was 1$

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year,

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year, because of some new regulations which are introduced by the government, is raised. So, its

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is being dropped.

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, there are some reasons that

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policy does not

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on

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the amount of

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.

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, most

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people

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cannot change their diet habits owing to the high cost. By

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I mean, when

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price

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the price

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of a product raise, not only they do not decrease their demand but

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, they

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themselves to new circumstances.

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, the vital role of willpower should not be overlooked. It means, having a healthy diet requires

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regular practice which

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not be affected

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any condition.

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poor willpower, and loves sugary food, even if prices of these foods will be raised,

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might not be declined

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. To sum up, in my opinion, there are some reasons

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the enhancing

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of some products which are sugary cannot contribute to decreasing their

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. Reasons

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people

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adaptation and poor

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are two of the prominent ones.