In many countries these days, the number of people continuing their education after school has increased, and the range of courses available at universities and colleges has also increased. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Education plays an important role in
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development. It is witnessed that there is an
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amount of people continuing their
study
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studies
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after school, followed by the range of
courses
available to adapt
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demand. I believe
this
is a positive development. Higher education could level up the knowledge of a people.
To begin
with, it is more effective to get a job if students benefit themselves
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university
studies.
In other words
, the
courses
they learn in
university
lay the foundation for
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life.
In addition
, the
broden
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burden
of
university
courses
are
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chance for more students to
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their passion and enthusiasm.
For instance
, if a student failed an entrance exam to a
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university
, he could have another chance to
study
in another
study
course with
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score and
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what he wants.
On the other hand
, due to the highly competitive marketplace, it is difficult for people with lower education standards to find
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good
job
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.
By comparison
, there is no denying that many quit
the
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study
to start a business and become successful like Bill Gates.
However
, they must pour a lot of time and effort
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practical experience while students learn that from school
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or
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. To conclude, the essay is about the positive trend which is the increase of learners and
university
courses
.
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