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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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 garbage is not recycled adequately. While some individuals argued that imposing strict roles is the main method to enhance recycling, I strongly disagree with limited
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 infrastructure fairly.
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greenhouse gases emission
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 are the only step that should be taken by authorities. I do believe that,
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 it can lead to garbage recycling enhancement,
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 of appropriate equipment
such
 as separated boxes for papers, plastics, and other dried waste is a serious barrier to
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 do not have enough space in their
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 to recycle waste materials.
For example
, I live in a 40 meters apartment where there is
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 extra space to place a new box or equipment for recycling.
Furthermore
, there are lots of alternative methods which could encourage
people
 to separate and recycle their trash.
For instance
, governments may consider some municipal benefits
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 or energy charge
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 for citizens who recycle their waste efficiently. In conclusion, based on the shortage of appropriate facilities
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 the possibility of promotion encouragement ways, I strongly recommend that governments must
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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