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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework in order to be successful at school

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Homework
 is a big part of the school education system in a lot of places in the world. There is a lot of discussion around
this
 topic and if pupils should receive more tasks that are usually supposed to be done after the class.
Homework
 can be beneficial to educate oneself more about a certain matter. Diving more into a topic can spark interest so the person wants to learn additional information, which leads to a more open mind,
curiosity
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and curiosity
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 and it is more likely that they will be more attentive during the lesson.
For instance
, writing an essay about global warming makes the person writing it aware of the damage it is causing and potential ways one can do to slow it down. Some exercises can help to gain the skills required in a certain subject. Sometimes a lesson can be too short to practice and master a task,
homework
 can assist pupils to get better, feel more confident when performing in class and receive higher grades.
For example
, solving a difficult math problem,
analyzing
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and analyzing
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 it can reduce mistakes,
stress
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and stress
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 and shorten the solving
time
. On another hand,
homework
 can occupy a huge amount of
time
. If teachers get too carried away with
after class
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after-class
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 assignments or big projects, it causes a lot of stress,
lack
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 of motivation and can even impact
behavior
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behaviour
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 and well-being. To give an example, pupils often minimize the
time
 for their hobbies, socializing, resting and going outdoors. Considering everything, the advantages of
homework
 outweigh the disadvantages but it is very important to not overdo school work, rest and leave
time
 for other loved activities.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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