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People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown from other areas. As a results, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantage of this tend outweigh the disadvantage?

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 people are interested to dine
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 varieties of food from all over the world.
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 it is good for health to eat different kinds of foods, its trends
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 more negative implication than positive results because of a few reasons. The advancement of transportation provide better opportunities for
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 of varieties
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 from other countries. so people can able to get
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 kind of food varieties from different countries.
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