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Band 4.5

Many people like the fact that they no longer need to buy newspapers because there are so many free news sources online. Other people are worried that online news sources are not always reliable. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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These days, most
people
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 believe the fact that there is no requirement to buy
newspapers
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 or read physical
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 because they can
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 online websites or have a share of free
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 that online
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 always are not truthless or reliable. As far as I am concerned
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the
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 has a better point of
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idea
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, which means in
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 or cutting trees to produce many books or letters,
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 try to
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sources
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the
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 same
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, have their own methods, they find it hard to trust online
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 and they have to buy
newspapers
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. Some of them believe that some online wellsprings try to make
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fake
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 to increase their rating and absorb some viewers, which means they are not reliable at all for them. In my
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opinion, the
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society. In
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sources
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, podcasts, websites and shopping online. We can save our
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 and energy in
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 of wasting our
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 doing exactly what we can do online. But ,for companies, it's very necessary that they
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to
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 that require because, after
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COVID-19
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. In conclusion, there were two groups with two different ideas about using
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them, and the second
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 had the opposite
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, which means they thought some online
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 are not reliable, and they should buy physical
newspapers
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. My point of view is closer to the
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 reasons which have been discussed.

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task response
Ensure to provide clear and relevant examples to support your points. Include more specific details and examples to enhance your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to using cohesive devices to improve the flow of your essay. Use transition words to connect ideas and paragraphs more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Adequate structure with an introduction and conclusion.
task response
Clear expression of personal opinion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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