A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to the social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer including any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
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era where Correct article usage
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the
technology gives us the opportunity to see Correct article usage
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the
person’s life and Correct article usage
a
their
social Correct pronoun usage
apply
status
. Use synonyms
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worth Correct article usage
A person’s
presently
valued based on social Add a missing verb
is presently
status
and material possession rather than the old-fashioned Use synonyms
for instance
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kindness
, and other things. Despite the truth Use synonyms
seems
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seeming
out-dated
value and good behaviour still matter and Correct your spelling
outdated
urgent
to be seen.
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are urgent
selfish
to get what they want will be untrustworthy. Honour and Add a missing verb
are selfish
kindness
which is unseen Use synonyms
for
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by
attitude
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this
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at
president
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presidential
attitude
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taking
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take
this
occasion for their social Linking Words
status
. Use synonyms
The society
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Society
need
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needs
this
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a problematic
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in their Fix the agreement mistake
issues
attitude
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they
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though they
the
social Correct article usage
apply
status
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judged
more important, there will be troubles Add a missing verb
is judged
occurs
in aspects of lifeWrong verb form
occurring
.
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attitude
only important in politics and Use synonyms
stakeholder
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stakeholders
next
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status
of Use synonyms
person
can be Add an article
a person
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similarly
and equal Replace the word
similar
with
their honesty and Change preposition
to
kindness
. Use synonyms
However
, it should be emphasized that even Linking Words
so
many individuals craving for their social Correct word choice
though so
status
and fortune, they should care Use synonyms
with
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.
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status
as well as wealth Use synonyms
important
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is important
live
, we should remember that Replace the word
lives
kindness
is required to keep Use synonyms
this
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human
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humans
the
brilliant creatureCorrect article usage
apply
,
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apply
existence
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existing
things
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of things
in
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on
earth
.Add an article
the earth
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