A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to the social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer including any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

We live in
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era where
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technology gives us the opportunity to see
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person’s life and
their
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social
status
.
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worth
presently
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valued based on social
status
and material possession rather than the old-fashioned
for instance
honour,
kindness
, and other things. Despite the truth
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true, I am disagreeing with the statement because the
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value and good behaviour still matter and
urgent
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to be seen. While people only can see the visible aspect, those who
selfish
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to get what they want will be untrustworthy. Honour and
kindness
which is unseen
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human, are the most vital
attitude
in
this
era. Based on my standpoint and experience, let’s look
in
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the
president
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election in my country. Societies are promised by their experience in leading many organisations and projects, yet we did not know whether they have a good
attitude
or just
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this
occasion for their social
status
.
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need
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a reliable leader to hold
this
country in order that there are no discrepancies among the community.
In addition
, many corruptors have
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issue
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in their
attitude
even
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had a lot of properties, cars, and money. If
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social
status
judged
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more important, there will be troubles
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in aspects of life
.
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Does the old-fashioned
attitude
only important in politics and
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stakeholders
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? Absolutely no. Many jobs require these values to run their business and determine their
next
leader. I believe that the social
status
of
person
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a person
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can be
similarly
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and equal
with
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their honesty and
kindness
.
However
, it should be emphasized that even
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many individuals craving for their social
status
and fortune, they should care
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other. It
a
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simple statement but hard to
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. To conclude,
although
social
status
as well as wealth
important
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is important
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in our
live
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lives
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, we should remember that
kindness
is required to keep
this
humanity sense. Not only for
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humans
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as
the
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brilliant creature
,
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but for all the
existence
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things
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of things
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in
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earth
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the earth
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  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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