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Some people believe that the best way to travel within a city is by car. Others believe that it is best to travel by bicycle. Discuss both and give your opinion.

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 essay, I would like to analyze two different sets of arguments.
One
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 group of people believes
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 a
car
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 as a
commute
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 medium whereas the other prefers
bicycle
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 as the better mode of transportation for sightseeing in the
city
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. I believe biking is a better way to travel around a
city
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 than
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car
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.
Car
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 as a navigation mode has its own unique advantages.
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, the commuting time from
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 place to another is a lot less and if you can utilize the highway infrastructure you can reach your destination even faster.
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, remote areas of the
city
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 or going from
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 end to another using a four-wheel transport method is the preferred
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.
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, comfort is a big plus when travelling by
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 due to the climate-controlled interior and relaxing music of your choice.
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, using a
bicycle
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 has its own advantages. The main benefit is,
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 slow method of transport lets you take frequent stops to experience the
city
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's architecture, appreciate the beauty of the
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's design, and enjoy the various food and shopping places it has to offer. Another benefit is the
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 nature of the travel; go at your convenience, park anywhere and with dedicated bike lanes you face essentially little to no traffic at all.
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 more point to add is riding a
bicycle
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 is great for the environment. As cities get overcrowded with
car
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 traffic, it becomes our duty to employ
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 practice which produces zero carbon emissions and helps the environment.
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 added benefit it is a great way to get some exercise and stay healthy. Me , I will definitely prefer a
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 as my preferred mode of transportation because I love to explore the smaller details that a
city
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 has to offer and using a bike is the best way to take frequent stops and experience all a
city
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 has to offer.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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