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When choosing a job, salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#job #salary #consideration
In the modern era,high earnings are an essential part of everyone's life. There are those who say that wage consideration is crucial for the job, others believe that it should not. In my view, when
people
 choose any occupation, their
first
 priority has to
a
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good amount of
salary
.
Firstly
, there are different kinds of reasons why
people
 believe that concern about pay, is not necessary. Perhaps the main reason why
people
 are in favour of
this
 idea is that
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passion for the profession is a more significant consideration. Without enjoying
work
,they are losing interest as well as cannot achieve any goals in their life.
For example
, my cousin's sister is addicted to her
work
. she never thought about pay, she gained lots of knowledge about her
work
-related and got a promotion every year for her excellent performance. That's why
people
 think that
money
 is not important to select a job.
secondly
,there is
also
 a case for the idea that demand for high
salary
. Because they think that
money
 gives
the
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 motivation to
work
 willingly. when
people
 get satisfactory wages, they become more attentive to their
work
.
For instance
, those
people
 are working in a multinational company, and get a huge amount of
money
.
As a result
 the working power of workers increasing day by day. As employees care about their
salary
. In conclusion, it must be said that
salary
 consideration is magnificent. wage makes too many potential workers. If
people
 care to select their job as a
money
 concern, they will be satisfied with their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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