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many people spoil natural beauties like sea ,beaches ,mountains and lakes .do people responsible for that ?what should be done to stop people to spoil natural beauty ?give the reasons and examples for your answer.

#people #beauties #sea #beaches #mountains #lakes #beauty
Humans have done many bad things without thinking. But the worst thing we did is,
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exploiting
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nature
. In
this
essay
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 I am going to share my views about the exploitation of
nature
. In
this
 world, every living organism
took
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 birth because of
nature
. We have damaged our
nature
 very badly through industrialisation, deforestation and global warming. By doing
this
, we are not only destroying
nature
, but we are
also
 destroying humanity as well. Our existence has become a threat to the earth because of the things we have done. But
nature
 has the capacity to recover and for that to happen, we must take necessary precautions. To stop global warming and repair
nature
, we have to bring some change to modern society.
For example
, when people go on trips to beaches, waterfalls or forests, they trash the whole land with
plastic
 substances. Because of
this
, the land will become unfertile and when animals eat the
plastic
 substances, they die. The public does
this
 because they are not aware of the result. So, Governments should spread awareness among the public. Cutting down trees to build buildings and factories should be reduced. Many plant species are endangered and we need trees to breathe air.
Hence
, the people who have authority should take action on
this
 immediately. All over the world,
plastic
 is being used for packaging and storing.
Plastic
 can not be recycled,
hence
 it can pose a danger to
nature
. So, abolishing
plastic
 usage is very important and government officials should take care of it. I want
to conclude
this
 essay by saying that, it is not too late to change ourselves. Changes should be introduced immediately. If not, we would be digging our own graves. Mother
nature
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 gave birth to us and we should protect her.
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