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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree?

#missions #space #earth #demand #attention
It is a fact that the discoveries which scientists have done in outer space are crucial for our future
although
 it is a highly debatable topic since we need plenty of sources and money for doing it. Humans
also
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 worried about the problems that they face on Earth. In my opinion, astronauts must keep searching the universe and find a new home for
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humanity. There are several reasons for doing those missions.
To begin
 with, we lack food as well as water owing to
rapid
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 growth of
human
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 population. Despite
there
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are
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 only 8 billion
people
 on Earth, a lot of
people
 suffer from hunger and dehydration,
thus
 when we think that
this
 number increases enormously every day, hunger will be unavoidable in the near future.
Consequently
, if we cannot find any new resources in a short time, we will die soon and
world
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 population will decrease rapidly due to
aforementioned
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 reasons.
Furthermore
, even if we found a way for creating new resources, we cannot cope with
crowd
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 of
people
. There are billions of
people
 in the world and it keeps increasing every
second
. After one or two hundred years, streets, shops and big cities will
packed
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 with
people
.
As a result
, there will be chaos among humans. The governments will not able to do anything because as long as they try to do something, society will get mad about it as making babies is a part of human nature and it is unstoppable. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that if we try to stop these missions,
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 generations will suffer from aforesaid things
such
 as hunger and overpopulation; thereby, I believe we must keep doing these
searchs
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searches
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 generations.
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