Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Nowadays, people are too obsessed with buying or acquiring material things such as expensive clothes or cars because, they think that people around them will judge them based on what they possess.
Many and many
people
are focused on their image in society. They try to buy expensive stuff such
as trendy clothes
or luxury cars because their priority is society's opinion
of them. However
, is it a reality for the majority of the people
?
On the one hand, young people
are more obsessed with other's opinion
so they try to buy fashionable, designed Fix the agreement mistake
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clothes
to look cool. It happens because a big number of individuals want to create a rich personal image. For instance
, some people
rent a luxury car to look cool in the eyes of their friends, despite the fact that they can not afford this expensive vehicles
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this expensive vehicle
these expensive vehicles
Moreover
, many individuals prepare to loan money
from the bank only because they want to be cool.
On the other hand
, there are numerous smart people
who think rationally so they do not care about others. This
type of individual has high self-esteem so they do not need expensive goods to create a positive opinion
of somebody. For example
, billionaires such
as Mark Zuckerberg wear simple, comfortable clothes
because they do not care about others' opinion
and are focused on their own comfort. Fix the agreement mistake
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Furthermore
, they know how to invest money
accurately so buying clothes
or luxury cars has no sense for them because they will better invest this
money
and afterwards will have revenues from it.
To sum up, in my opinion
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people
are focused on their looks so I fully agree with this
statement because they try to buy trendy goods and are prepared to loan money
for it.Submitted by dominikskorbus on
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