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Some people argued that history is of little or no use. Others believe that studying history give many benefits. Discuss those views and give your own opinion?

#people #history
There are argumentative ideas heating up a debate over whether it is crucial to learn
history
. While some claim that it plays a paramount integral role, the opposite makes a statement that it is useless. I consider myself an advocate of the former, while the latter is valid to some extent. Without a shadow of a doubt, absorbing historical information brings
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significant inspiration
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 patriotism. Looking back at incredible fellow countrymen and their sacrifice which contributed to freedom in
this
 day and age, young generations can get a sense of pride.
For example
, Vietnam has been through two great wars with America and France, which facilitates the youngsters thoroughly empathize with their ancestors' suffering and be grateful for what they have today. While the redeeming feature of
history
 is widely acknowledged,
history
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certain aspects, is not useful enough to be applied in real life. Given the fact that everyone has a tendency to focus on other fields
such
 as technology in order to meet the requirements of the job market rather than research information about previous events.
For instance
, Vietnamese students are likely to be handed down technology insights which tremendously do wonders for their future careers in the long run.
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, it is a logical reason to spend time
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 other fields rather than look back at the past. To sum up, eliminating
history
 on a daily basis to fully focus on other skills is rational to some extent;
however
, I fully believe that its merit may overshadow its limits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights
  • progression
  • values
  • beliefs
  • heritage
  • identity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • subjective
  • practical
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