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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, technology has become a significant part of life. Technology and technological inventions
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 as laptops, cell phones and so on have the biggest influence on young individuals. In my opinion, I completely agree with the given statement because
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 of gadgets had led
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 of detailed novels or scholarly
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 which caused them to have shorter attention spans.
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 of the negative effect of cell phones and laptops is short attention and not being able to concentrate for an extended amount of time. Spending a lot of time on social media made young individuals read short
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, sometimes with no positive or useful context. It led to problems with focusing on studies and later could impact
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, after reading short
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, reading long, detailed works with hard and academic grammar
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 it is a novel, scientific research or scholarly
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 might be hard to understand and
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, the easy access to already completed written works on the internet has made students lazy. Lack of reading useful works and materials
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 affected students' vocabulary and writing skills which led them to copy
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 from the internet and not think on their own.
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, teenagers who do not expand their knowledge
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 which led them to copy from
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 after.
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, young people do not think on their own and do not study. In conclusion, expanded usage of gadgets negatively affects
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young individuals reading and writing skills by making them read short and not informative
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 their vocabulary and task achievement weak.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-reliance
  • comprehension skills
  • digital content
  • sustained reading capabilities
  • texting and messaging apps
  • abbreviations
  • acronyms
  • emojis
  • formally and coherently
  • educational resources
  • scholarly articles
  • educational apps
  • enhance
  • digital platforms
  • blogs
  • social media posts
  • online forums
  • concise
  • impactful writing
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