Nowadays many people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In
modern
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world
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a lot of
people
spend money on famous
brands
of clothes, phones, cars and other expensive things.
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my point of view, there might be different reasons. First of all, some
people
find it cool to have
famous
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a famous
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brand.
Also
, some of them can show that they have money by purchasing expensive stuff. You can pay attention
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children. They always want the best toy or phone to show it to their friends. The same situation you may see with adult
people
.
On the other hand
,
for instance
, rich
persons
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or celebrities can't wear cheap clothes or drive "Zaporoshez" because they have a status and can't just do what they want, as
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always
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there, to show it to the world.
Moreover
,
such
famous
brands
can be just good and comfortable, simply the best,
that
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and that
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is why
people
may love and want them.
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IPhone
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is the most popular
among
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phones
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phone
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. I am sure,
that is
because of
it's
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great
designe
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design
and how easy it is even for older
people
to use it. I admit that it is good when
people
want those famous
brands
, as it might have
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a positive
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side on development. As other
brands
will do their best to become better. So
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as a result
we will have many great products for a good
competible
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compatible
price.
To sum up
I want to say that it is always good when we have our favorite brand. As we spend less time to think what we want and at the same time other
brands
develop themself that leads to changes
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is always good.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Conspicuous consumption
  • Brand loyalty
  • Elitism
  • Marketing strategies
  • Consumer psychology
  • Purchase behavior
  • Economic stratification
  • Sustainability
  • Luxury goods
  • Peer influence
  • Global marketing
  • Brand equity
  • Materialistic values
  • Status symbol
  • Quality perception
  • Investment piece
  • Influencer culture
  • Exclusivity
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