The grwoth of online shopping will one day Lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.Do you agree or disagree?

It is possible that all shops in towns and cities will disappear because of the increasing online shopping
behavior
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behaviour
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.
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
opinion which will be discussed in
this
essay.
First
of all,
people
do want to see and touch original
products
.
This
is because they want to make sure that
products
are
in
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of
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good quality and worth paying for.
For example
, I bought online garbage bags and they can not be used as the plastic is too thin,
therefore
I have to buy a new set of them at BigC. Another reason is that we want to know if
products
suit us.
For instance
, I always try on clothes in shops before buying
online
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them online
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. The
second
point is that
this
can avoid online
frauds
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fraud
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. Many
people
are deceived to transfer money to sellers,
however
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they do not receive their goods.
For instance
, my friend bought a
furby
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doll for two thousand baht, but she received nothing.
Therefore
, a lot of them rely on shopping in stores rather than online. Purchasing at stores can
also
be trustworthy.
As a
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lot of
people
receive fake
products
from online shopping.
For example
, I shopped for a
second hand
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second-hand
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brandname
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brand name
last
year and received an unauthentic Gucci belt. In conclusion,
this
essay completely disagrees with
this
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the
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statement that one day all stores in towns and cities will be closed once the number of online shopping rises since
people
do want to see and touch original
products
and the store can avoid online
frauds
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fraud
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.
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