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Schools should stop using books for teaching and instead use films, TV and computers. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#schools #books #films #tv #computers
E-learning is
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development
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can affect
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institutions
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students
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% less than other
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developing
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investment
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technology
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 subscription for educational tools
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multimedia resources
  • captivating
  • complex subjects
  • visual and auditory stimuli
  • digitalized future
  • technological skills
  • cultivate
  • imagination
  • concentration
  • depth and detail
  • critical thinking
  • analytical skills
  • disparities in education
  • tangible experience
  • continuous learning
  • personal development
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