Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

School
plays a major role in children's life
however
some people think that
kids
should not have homework from their educator,
although
others believe that assignments have a very important role in the educational process.
Firstly
,assignments are a key step in the learning process because it's help
kids
to maintain what they learned from
school
and can have a major impact
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students
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result
for example
a student who will spend more
time
studying and trying to solve exercise of the assignment will have more chance to have good marks in future than
student
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who
spend
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less
time
.
In
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the other hand,
homeworks
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homework
can be painful for some people because
kids
spend more than 6 hours at
the
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school
so
that is
a long
time
.They need to take rest and practice other activities
such
as
sport
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or play games that can help them to fresh up and relax as I was
child
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after
school
I wished to have
a
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free
time
to play football or take rest after a long day of
school
but
unfortunately
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my
school
gived
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gives
me
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long list of
homeworks
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homework
that takes all my
time
and energy . Schools and
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gouverment
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government
governments
need to find a way to make
educatinal
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educational
procees
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process
more fun and enjoyable for
kids
,
that
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will increase
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marks and will make children more motivated for
school
time
. In conclusion , I believe that
kids
need more
time
to rest and
fresh
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up ,
although
school
time
is enough for them to learn and improve
theire
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their
skills without
homeworks
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homework
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  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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